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Walking in the dead of night
Almost apprehensive of the sky
Stars sparkle in the black expanse
Black clouds go rolling by

As a cool breeze falls upon him
So too does a notion
That life is brief and fleeting
Like a wave upon the ocean

Then he must stand tall
Look the world in the eye
Master his own destiny
Not dwell on how or why

For this is not a dress rehearsal
He shall only have one shot
To make his mark forever
With the best that he has got

And if his best amounts to nothing
At least he will have tried
And that shall be his epitaph
After he has died
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=KaxantheDragon Jan 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
So true. "I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul." ~Invictus
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:iconfreds-head:
sounds like something Aleksandr Solzhenitsyn said
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thank you :iconfreds-head:
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=KaxantheDragon Jan 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No probs. ^^
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:iconbeeinthebottle:
This is very nicely written. Perhaps a nit: I was with you up until the very last line. Sure, "after he has died" would be factual. But I know of very few people that have epitaphs before they die, so it jars on me. It doesn't impart any new information...it seems as if it's primarily there as a rhyme for "tried." I'd love to see you do something more creative with that closing line, something in keeping with the strength of the rest of the piece.
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:iconfreds-head:
yes
it is a bit of a forgone
that his epitaph is post death
thank you for your input and interest
and happy new year :)
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*Odoms-Spire Dec 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
WOW! Very awesome! :)
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:iconfreds-head:
well, thank you very much
glad you think so :)
thanks for the fave
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*Odoms-Spire Dec 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You're most welcome and keep writing awesome stuff! :D
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~FallenAngelEmpire Dec 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow i love this :D :D it flows well and i don't even know. i love this!<3
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